LC Rattata

[Altariel von Sweep]

[OVERVIEW]
Rattata's decent Speed tier and high Attack stat along with Hustle and several coverage options may make it sound like a good breaker which dismantles many teams on paper, but in practice it is quite frail and gets easily revenge killed by priority moves such as Mach Punch from Timburr and Sucker Punch from Pawniard. Its heavy reliance on Hustle makes Rattata an unoptimal breaker, as it depends on accuracy to land some important hits. As such, Rattata is outclassed by Rufflet as a Hustle wallbreaker due to Rufflet's higher Attack, better bulk, ability to set up, and better STAB attacks, and Bunnelby, which has Huge Power and better coverage options.

[SET]
name: Hustle Wallbreaker
move 1: Double-Edge / Return
move 2: Flame Wheel
move 3: Sucker Punch
move 4: Zen Headbutt / Hidden Power Grass
item: Life Orb
ability: Hustle
nature: Jolly
evs: 232 Atk / 76 Def / 180 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This set's purpose is to hit as strong as possible, making use of Rattata's STAB Return and coverage moves and clear the way for a teammate to clean late-game. However, due to the aforementioned reasons, Rattata is outclassed by Rufflet due to its better Attack stat, bulk, Flying STAB attacks, and ability to efficiently set up with Bulk Up, and Bunnelby, which has a higher Attack thanks to Huge Power and is a better wallbreaker.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Altariel von Sweep, 330191]]
- Quality checked by: [[Fiend, 208173], [Merritt, 213064]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Electrolyte, 148071]]

 

[Nineage]

Altariel von Sweep this is your reminder to please get this out of WIP.

 

[Altariel von Sweep]

ready for qc

 

[Fiend]

Man why is your overview so long. I'm suggesting stuff to make it read better.

[OVERVIEW]
Rattata's decent Speed tier and high Attack stat along with Hustle and several coverage options may sound like a good breaker which dismantles many teams in paper. [Period here.] but [Remove.] Yet [Add.] in practise it is quite frail and is prone to get easily revenge killed by priority moves such as Mach Punch from Timburr and Sucker Punch from Pawniard. Many of its coverage options turn out to be weak, and usually is walled by Rock-types such as Onix and Tirtouga. [ <-- Is this sentence necessary?] The heavy reliance on Hustle makes Rattata unreliable to act as a breaker, as it depends on accuracy to land some important hits. As such, Rattata is directly outclassed by Rufflet as a Hustle wallbreaker due to a higher Attack stat [Remove.], bulk, ability to setup and better STAB attacks, and [Remove.] or [Add.] Bunnelby, which has Huge Power and better coverage options.

[SET]
I think Double Edge is far more valuable on Rattata since you have almost 0 bulk to begin with. Double Edge seems to be a consistent 3 damage more than Return, which sometimes matters a lot, and give Rattata more reach mid game after some 'mons take hazard damage. I remember the added damage just being nice for the fairly rare knocked and max hp Spritzee and Foongus.

I also want to note HP Grass is great on Rattata too (it does 50% min to Tirt, 100% min to BJ Onix, 76% to Evio). I think this is better than ZHB on Rattata personally, but I am unsure if ZHB should keep the slash.

name: idc what you name it
move 1: Double Edge / Return
move 2: Flame Wheel
move 3: Sucker Punch
move 4: Hidden Power [Grass] / Zen Headbutt / Pursuit
item: Life Orb
ability: Hustle
nature: Jolly
evs: EVs: 228 Atk / 76 Def / 180 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Good.

QC: 1/2

 

[Merritt]

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[Altariel von Sweep]

ready for qc 2

 

[Merritt]

[OVERVIEW]
This is too long for something as bad (mediocre at the absolute best) as Rattata. Combine some of these sentences.

As a rough example:
"Rattata's decent Speed tier and high Attack stat along with Hustle and several coverage options let it attempt to break apart opposing teams, but it is quite frail and prone to being KOed by priority moves such as Mach Punch from Timburr and Sucker Punch from Pawniard. In addition, Hustle makes Rattata inconsistent as a wallbreaker, since missing attacks will often result in Rattata being defeated. As such, Rattata is directly outclassed by Rufflet as a Hustle wallbreaker due to better stats, ability to set up, and better STAB attacks, and Bunnelby, which has Huge Power and better coverage options."

[SET]
Remove Pursuit, and slash HP Grass before Zen Headbutt. Increase Attack EVs to 232 accordingly. Slash Naive after Jolly for natures.

[SET COMMENTS]
", being able to work on late game." Clarify what this means, does this mean Rattata can attempt to clean lategame or that it can clear the way for a teammate lategame?

[CREDITS]
good

2/2

 

[Altariel von Sweep]

ready for GP!

 

[Aaronboyer]

This is an AM GP Check, Implement What You Want

AM GP Check

[OVERVIEW]
Rattata's decent Speed tier and high Attack stat along with Hustle and several coverage options may make it (without "make it" or some other way of addressing Rattata, it makes it sound like "tier" and "attack" are both the subjects of the sentence)sound like a good breaker which dismantles many teams in on paper,(RC);(ASC) yet,(AC) in practise practice,(AC)(introductory element to the second clause) it is quite frail and gets easily revenge killed by priority moves such as Mach Punch from Timburr and Sucker Punch from Pawniard. The heavy reliance on Hustle makes Rattata an unoptimal to act as a breaker, as it depends on accuracy to land some important hits. As such, Rattata is outclassed by Rufflet as a Hustle wallbreaker due to a higher Attack, bulk, ability to setup set up and better STAB attacks, or Bunnelby, due to Huge Power and better coverage options.

[SET]
name: Hustle Wallbreaker
move 1: Double Edge / Return
move 2: Flame Wheel
move 3: Sucker Punch
move 4: Zen Headbutt / Hidden Power Grass
item: Life Orb
ability: Hustle
nature: Jolly
evs: EVs: 232 Atk / 76 Def / 180 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This set's purpose is to hit as strong as possible,(AC) making use of Rattata's STAB Return and coverage moves,(RC) and being able to clear the way for a teammate to clean in late-game(AH). However, due to the aforementioned reasons, Rufflet outclasses it due to its ability to efficiently set up with Bulk Up coupled to with its better Attack stat, bulk and Flying STABs, and Bunnelby, which has a higher Attack thanks to Huge Power and is a better wallbreaker.

 

[Altariel von Sweep]

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[Electrolyte]

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[OVERVIEW]
Rattata's decent Speed tier and high Attack stat along with Hustle and several coverage options may make it sound like a good breaker which dismantles many teams on paper;(comma instead), yet, but in practice(RC) it is quite frail and gets easily revenge killed by priority moves such as Mach Punch from Timburr and Sucker Punch from Pawniard. The Its heavy reliance on Hustle makes Rattata an unoptimal breaker, as it depends on accuracy to land some important hits. As such, Rattata is outclassed by Rufflet as a Hustle wallbreaker due to a Rufflet's higher Attack, better bulk, ability to set up,(AC) and better STAB attacks, or and Bunnelby, due to which has Huge Power and better coverage options.

[SET]
name: Hustle Wallbreaker
move 1: Double-(add hyphen)Edge / Return
move 2: Flame Wheel
move 3: Sucker Punch
move 4: Zen Headbutt / Hidden Power Grass
item: Life Orb
ability: Hustle
nature: Jolly
evs: EVs: 232 Atk / 76 Def / 180 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
This set's purpose is to hit as strong as possible, making use of Rattata's STAB Return and coverage moves and being able to clear the way for a teammate to clean late-game. However, due to the aforementioned reasons, Rattata is outclassed by Rufflet outclasses it due to its better Attack stat, bulk, Flying STAB attacks, and ability to efficiently set up with Bulk Up coupled with its better Attack stat, bulk and Flying STABs, and Bunnelby, which has a higher Attack thanks to Huge Power and is a better wallbreaker.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Altariel von Sweep, 330191]]
- Quality checked by: [[Fiend, 208173], [Merritt, 213064]]
- Grammar checked by: [[Electrolyte, check purple in my sig]]

GP 1/1

 

[Altariel von Sweep]

Done