Oshawott (QC 1/2)

[Sultan]

[OVERVIEW]
Being a pure water type in LC, Oshawott suffers from a huge amount of competition, and it doesn't really have anything to set it apart from the others. Any special attacking sets will be outclassed by Staryu, which has better coverage and can double as a spinner, Clamperl and Shellder are better at sweeping, since Oshawott doesn't have a way of boosting its speed, and defensively, Mareanie and Frillish possess more bulk, beneficial abilities, and better support moves. Oshawott's stats are comparatively mediocre all around and it doesn't really have any moves to set it apart from its competition, leaving it without a niche.

[SET]
name: Swords Dance
move 1: Aqua Tail
move 2: Sacred Sword
move 3: Aqua Jet / Aerial Ace
move 4: Swords Dance
item: Life Orb
ability: Torrent
nature: Adamant / Jolly
evs: 236 Atk / 236 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Since any special attacking set will inevitably be outclassed by Staryu, your best bet is to try a Swords Dance set, as it does have decent coverage and priority. However, it's weak without a boost, it can be worn down easily since it needs the Life Orb for power, and its speed tier leaves much to be desired as it's outsped by metagame staples such as Mienfoo, Pawniard, and Snivy, none of which are KO'd by a +2 Aqua Jet. Since Oshawott doesn't break anything that Shellder can't and the latter can boost its Speed, Shellder is simply a much better option for a teamslot.

[CREDITS]
- Written by: [[Sultan of Skook, 404053]]
- Quality checked by: [[Fiend, 208173], [<username2>, <userid2>]]
- Grammar checked by: [[<username1>, <userid1>]]

 

[Fiend]

I sat on this since i was thinking maybe zRD was a better set, but it simply doesn't seem to be.
honestly 14 vs 15 speed isn't that important, so i think you might as well run Ada for the extra damage. reverse the slashes
overall this is a bit wordy, but i don't have anything specific to point out
QC: 1/2

 

[Sultan]

Ready for QC 2

 

[Merritt]

[OVERVIEW]
This is too wordy because you've got far too many examples. You should only have two - Staryu is a better special attacker while Corphish is a better physical attacker.

[SET]
Swords Dance first move if the set is named Swords Dance. Remove Jolly altogether.

[SET COMMENTS]
Remove the part mentioning a special set since you shouldn't be mentioning other sets in set comments. Again, cut this down because it's really wordy. Sentence about what the set tries to do (set up Swords Dance and break through the opposing team), then a sentence about why it fails (fairly slow, very frail, extremely weak before it sets up SD). Last sentence should keep the Shellder mention, but also add a Corphish mention.

[CREDITS]
good

Tag me when you implement this so I can take another look.

 

[Nineage]

Sultan of Skook final reminder to please implement this check

 

[Merritt]

Reassigning this.